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Old 10-09-05, 11:06 PM   #2
Texxus
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wow at how fuckin long this shit is...might aswell get it published and win a blue bonet fuck...well anyways.I like how you 2 collabed on this,seemed like you fuckers put alot of work into it,The structure is good not hard to read,The flow was good even though you just say a line then he says a line,Vocabulary in this was nicely put,like i had to open up a webster dictionairy for god sake,Imagery ok didnt really catch me,Emotion was good ,i was feelin the last bar...werd,overall this was a good OM....8/10

i would of rather seen like 2lines from BC then 2lines from MS...but this work out good at the end...
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