well if ur looking for poetic criticism i cant really do that, it seems more like a motivational spoken word thing than it does a literary piece of work. I liked the flow, i liked it overall(maybe cept the biggie smalls line) but i like this kind of rhythmic, motivational, simple style, i think its very effective.

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This is my sig. what?

I'm white so u KNOW i can't rap =)

I will definitely RTF if u leave a link, thanks!