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Old 10-12-05, 09:21 PM   #14
chip
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Originally Posted by ~Eire~
Title: Words about words

any constructive criticism is welcome and i will RTF if u ask me to.



Injecting this page with my pen,
The ink-an antidote to the poison of pain.
I sober my sorrows with words. So intoxicating.
Diction is my addiction.
The wonderful thing about words? Well,
I can Tell tales as I Trail my pen,
Spilt tears, mixed with ink,
create a cocktail of broken dreams;
or stories of purest love.
Language can be a barrier.
But written breaks boundaries and builds bonds.
writing captures moments,so that one moment lives on.
But the worst thing about words?
theres not enough vocabulary in the whole wide world,
to express the emotional extremeties each of us experience.
Whether its deep joy,a documentary of dreams or depression.
Action! Not writing may be the best form of expression.


wow.... this iz beautiful...... sorta flowed like spoken word....... i'm not sure i could give u any help with elevation on this piece..... good voc. and metas were nice..... u are quickly becoming my favorite poet (after Tweety, i'm her #1 fan)...... 10/10 overall for this great piece............
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