v/9th degree...

besides having an all around better punch...yours didnt rhyme...

in the second line the "IH" sound is the stressed verb...youre trying to rhyme off unstressed verbs...which doesnt work at all...

in case that didnt make sense heres what i meant...when you rap it you put a harder emphasis on the vowel sounds that i put in caps...

the vowels in caps would have had to be the same sound in order for this to rhyme...you cant rhyme unstressed vowels...unless youre in kindergarten...

..Yo 9th wants to talk about some n(OH)-sh(oh)w
And your one to talk..
With rhymes are as cheap as a n(IH)ckle Jack The R(IH)ph(oh)e

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