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Old 10-15-05, 06:56 AM   #36
chip
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Originally Posted by Mystic Chaos
Voted For: Sin`cere

v/sin'cere

sin'cere-your verse was pretty dope man, short but sweet...you had good flow...good structure...i feel your vocab was hott and intact...your topic was hard to keep track of...didnt really know what u were trying to do...but i feel you kept emotion tight..and everything in control. overall 8/10

chip-Your verse was hard to follow, first off ur verse was poorly structured...couldnt flow well at all..ur vocab wasnt much special but nothing to knock you on...i dont knwo if this was poetry or wut..but u had god emotion...and iight imagery..but nothing special.......u need to elevate a bit...but overall 6/10

v/sin'cere
rtf on one of my battles in 48 hours or this vote WILL be disqualified


haaa..... it was poetry....... i assumed we weren't gonna have a battle about love........ oh well, uppin for more votes...........
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