I liked this one a lot better then the other one I just read, this one is a little bit longer and it gave me a touch of what you were writin about. the emotion is really good, the flow is really good as well, but the imagery just blew me away. the emotion gives me that taste as well. Your vocab was really consistant and just got my intensions locked wit readin it all. so overall I say you did very good this straight up deserves a nomination man.

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