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Old 10-19-05, 01:09 AM   #50
Magic5
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Voted For: veyetal

Veyetal

this dudes a clown with rhymes, and RV is the jerk's stage
im not talking bout killing time, when im about to merk age
Decent..
whats this bout good days? cause i see free agent, that says alot
oh wait, having bad days....you're just talking bout whenever you drop
Ehh..
so what? im beating this kid, i dont need to be bringing reasons
cause i'll spring to make this bitch fall quicker than skipping seasons
Pretty chill..
this kid even insults himself, wow, how could ya be that dumb
even he knows he doesn't have skill.....just look where he's from
Nah..
4-0 eh, hope you were playing around, cause those 4 were all no game
but i'll ruin that record faster that trashing the hall of fame
Didn't connect..

-FokusS-

You juss "out and about" cuz "being pussy illegal"...........and "homie you criminal"
And judgin by yo "avy and text skillz".....you still aiming toward being original......
Nah..
I mean really You're juss lonely and unsucessful homie....as far as crews went....
Vey you got "eye' for this "shit" you should see.....I drop unexpectly like his sig bowel movements(bird shit)
Way too forced..
Looks like Tha LW tournament got you fucked......cuz you juss "Lose Well" V
...It's a shame...You would'nt "break me down" if you were "spelling me"
Decent concept.. worded bad..
Homie you're juss a "dull sepicmen"..... like god had prewritten seeds
he had majority of infant fans Wit Geber on his verses....he still did'nt get feed
Nope..
Yo homie this is juss "one on one" don't "Flex" wit me...and call for intefearance...
He wanna be a "Living Legend"... but Im afraid Daubs wit a sig can't fix yo apearance
Nah, didn't connect..

Overall, Veyetal came with quite a few decent lines with a few original concepts. His verse was pretty good, there was some pretty good wordplay tied in with decent punches. -FokusS-'s verse had a bunch of forced wordplay and punches. There wasn't a decent punchline, but there was a few decent concepts that were just worded wrong. But, in the end, Veyetal had the better overall verse and that's why he gets my vote.

Vote - Veyetal

-FokusS-, you should sign up for the Punchline League. It's one of the best leagues this site has ever seen, with over 50 people in it right now. It's a good place to elevate without messing up your records. You should sign up.