Thread: Clinched Fists
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Old 10-19-05, 03:10 PM   #4
Willa
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ok i on the other hand hated the hook not feeling ti for a text piece
vocab needs upped ur structure is getting better you need to work on wordplay this was overall a really basic piece nothing special i liked ur other 2 better
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