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Old 10-19-05, 03:23 PM   #5
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only understand this i'm not the best
i must confess...............

^I think the last lines kinda sum it uo, they express the vulnerability and doubt that was the underlying tone of this poem. Maybe the vocabulary and overall wordings can be improved, add more of a poetic sense to them. But you have potential nonetheless, you know how to put emotion in it and such. Imagery can be worked on as well.

Keep writing
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