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Old 10-21-05, 07:11 PM   #20
Illist
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From: In Your Nightmares.
This was feedback posted for Solitude

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v/ solitude..

a much better, cleaner verse. some ight punches also. the opener was the better one tho. even tho i used a line like this in the punchline league couple days ago.

not enuff post to vote, ill leave this as feed

Vip- i think you lacked punches in this, they just werent strong enuff. try to think up better concepts and keep your verse clean without stretchin ya lines. word.

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