I really love your choice of words, lots of nice vocab that don't sound forced like many kids try to do and just can't make it sound right. good job wit that. But the thing is if your gonna use vocab like that you should twist in some multiples more man, and instead of writing such "audio type" topicals try and write to a story like as if the reader was readin a novel try and do stories like that. But still try and consist with the dope vocab and try multiples man cuz that shit makes the flow way better. but overall I'd say this was good because well I love readin my own shit and well this reminds me of myself as I've told you a million times by now lmao.

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