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Old 10-22-05, 05:19 PM   #97
Willa
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
 
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Voted For: Paranoid

ok complexity both of you had it to an extent i feell both could have been a little better but sin ceres was jsut basic reall however i liked the style of writing he used with the recap

flow both good not complaints really rhyme scheme much much beter that most of rv lol god damn pretty good but sin cere got this

structure paranoid got but who gives a fuck really as long as it has complexity and flows its all good on a topical for me
ok basically there were just soo many quotable lines in paranoids battle btu i didnt like his closing bar

A thief, someone that fiends for them millions in life
Never will that be, mentality controls the spy’s fight
simple but good
Then the government stepped in, saying he’d die a thief
So the peasants asked another, is this lie just brief?
His fear to appear, was only to determine wrong
The ending to this fact of this annoying violin song
i really liked this bar

sincere has a few good lines too so props btu this was by far my favorite
A bleeding pen on top of the desk with scared claws
I suddenly paused…. Then I saw a black and red paw
props to both of you one of the closest battles ive seen but i think ive seen better from both of you

if you could rtf i will rtf again
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=210494
or any other cs battles thatnks
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