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Old 10-23-05, 05:01 PM   #2
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beat is appropriate for this type of introspective/reflective track


ur vocals cud be amped a couple decibels

ur flow is on beat...Im jus not sure I like ur rhyme scheme here


and in a couple spots, you forced your bars with too many words


deep lyrics...and I'm familiar with some of them...



flow picked up toward the end of the track...good



and Tupac's Keep ya head up kept popping in my mind...that chorus just invokes his...for better or worse...I dunno...not bad though


pretty decent track

almost a 7/10

just needs polish


deep though
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