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Old 10-24-05, 03:50 PM   #3
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is this the hook?...sounds like it

not bad...but again, hooks should be catchy...repetition is key

your phrase "brighter day"...could have been your focal point...Accent that part


ur flow sounds on point for the most part

I could hear u take a big breath...or swallow...that wasn't good, esp. at the point in the flow it happened


lyrics are pretty decent sounding


6.9-7/10 track


RTF Please

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=211585
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