is this the hook?...sounds like it
not bad...but again, hooks should be catchy...repetition is key
your phrase "brighter day"...could have been your focal point...Accent that part
ur flow sounds on point for the most part
I could hear u take a big breath...or swallow...that wasn't good, esp. at the point in the flow it happened
lyrics are pretty decent sounding
6.9-7/10 track
RTF Please
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