I could hear when your MIC or whatever came on...the hiss was way too noticeable
ur vocals are too loud
ur flow is good though
ur delivery isn't bad...because ur emotion is there...but u need to learn how to use ur voice (tone/inflections)...ur young, so you'll have time to figure it out...Basically, try to make yoiur raps more melodic and not monotone
ur flow is def. on in this...can't hate on that
and I like the tone of the track...it's dark
7/10
good shit...work on those levels though
P.S...Lyrics were decent at best...u can elevate that too
RTF...if u haven't already
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=211585