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Old 10-25-05, 09:39 PM   #12
Willa
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
 
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ok wren work on ur rhyme schem and ur structure all of ur second lines are stretched like whoa no personals with the exception of a fake one and im nto feeling it try to put multis in ur lines and work on wordplay and creativity all of ur lines were played so elevate i like ur id diss u but i dont knwo who u r line the best lol elevate
arsen good structure rhyme scheme much better from ur other battle wordplay pretty good personals good like all the multis
i luved ur last line good wordplay and personal props
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