meh this was an aight peace...topic was pretty original
what i like about it was the vocab it was quite big....but yet still understandable....there was a few spots where you got kinda tempting with big ass words but it was good....i think you need to work on the flow...it seemed choppy in a few spots....also work on imagry...and emotion...paint a picture for the reader....

not a bad peice stay up

__________________