First of all thanks for the feedback i appreciate it (But at the bottom of your OM you misspelled my name its with a K)
On to the feedback... This was a very nice piece I'd like to hear an audio so i hope you make it into one. The way you used your words set a scene for me like you were at a major battle and nobody respected you till you got on the mic I dont know why but thats what i saw trough it it was kinda dark and tranquill like the whole show stopped when you got up and everything was in silence you got a nice vocab and you came strong out the gate and everything was REAL which is what a lot of people lack REALITY. All in all i give it a 9/10
And maybe sometime we can do a collab if your down