First rhyme ive checked on here and if this is the standard of the site i gotta step my game the fuck up lol.

feedback:

I’ve been… down on the count… beaten & battered…
Slammed, shoved… everytime I keep speakin’ what matters
^ i liked this bar, kinda relate i guess

My Friends? I only got about Six or ten… and it depends…
I’m not sure about some… but others I know will defend…
^ thought it was weird you went from 6 to 10 but it was cool.

Inside I’m diein’… So I metaphor the hell out of every cypher…
Deny my rights? You might die tonight… cuz I’m not playin’…
I’m not a murderer, a gangsta, a thug, or a pimp… so I’m not sayin’…
^ probably my fave lines here

It was deep in points and real in points which is what hip hop needs.

i liked this like i said before, i dunno if i'm supposed to rate it but..8.5/10 lyricaly and vocab was nice.