yo i think i need to take LJS part considering me and Lmo are cousins and i wanted to do a song about family already.....

chorus......Lmo can sing kinda.........its a different kinda singing///no american idol shit but its coo fits the beat.....the vocals are too loud and it it should be better sounding if the mic was better........he needs to practice but hes better than before......if he was produced better than it would sound alot better....cant really hear the lyrics.....

1st verse......its aight.....you fell off in a few parts.....and forced alot of words....if you wouldnt have stumpled in some parts then it wouldnt sound like that but you did so it does......you can also work on your flow, you seem to know what your doing but you still ahve to perfect your craft..........like its liek you wnet in the booth laid it donw and felt it was good enough.....you should have laid it down a few times til it was perfect...............you music has to be flawless its importance is futile........your lyrics where the best out of the gorup becuase you kept it deep and personal..but you need to write your lines better.. take more time....

2nd verse.....aight his vioce is dope and can pivcture him doing some american physco song or something about killing poeple by shuving cotton balls int he ears?, LOL maybe becuase i heard his answer machine..........anyway....you fall off in some parts also and need to come a lil more liad back to this laid back track.....but you kept it to hype...should hav e calm donw and used more emotion it seems like the odd verse out the whole thing........but its decent

LJ...........your flow was the best out the whole song but your lines where off in a lil more spots then pthers and you need more emotion.....you got the most part of it donw but you need more emption becuase it sound s alil monotone you feel? so get into that shit.....lyrics where striaght but other thant that good....

the beat was decent not my type of beat but good........didnt see any flaws or extra snares or anything......so yup



AND IM BEING SERIOUS ..........READ THAT SHIT&^^^^^i didnt type it for nothing

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