Wow this was hot. Liking the vocab, i didnt really need to look it up - i understood the piece enough to realise what you meant by them.

The rhyme scheme was dope, i wasnt too sure about:

I spoke with respect.........look'd up........words thrown in direction
I started small......................."Is this where souls are collected?"

I didnt really catch a rhyme from that, it threw me off and i had to start from the next 2 lines.

Good topic, i havent really been around this site enough to know if its been used but im sure you did it justice whether it has or hasnt.

Good work, ill keep an eye for more of your work to come.

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