flow was a bit off, that could be caused by bad structure you have stretched and way to short lines...try to balance them out with syllables . vocab was not the best ive seen...you could enhance it as you go along in your open mic career. Your emotion could be upped as you get into detail and up ur imagery...this was a beginner-mediocore open mic honestly nothing special..but it was iight stay up homey....5.5/10

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