I liked this, the structure was nice, it wasn't overly crammed with attempts at being complex, it was simple and to the point. You hit the topic you had easily and the ending really made the whole poem that much more meaningful. You switched style a couple of times with your lines as JTR pointed out which if overly done ruins the poem, but you made it work and it added a bit more creativity to the look of your piece.

Overall a real nice drop. 8/10

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