nice piece......... flow was ok..... i think it might get mad slept on tho, cuz to be honest, it scares me....... i like the idea, it's pretty original to RV....... more of a spoken word type of thing, i was feelin it........ i'd give it a 7.5/10......... might wanna check the structure a little, dependin on where u were going w/ this.......

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