hmm..good stuff right here.
Liked the concept...creative.
Kept me interested too..

Also liked some of the multis in ya' shit...
My only advice to you is maybe add some internals 'n shit..
Like..instead of just having a multi at the end of the line..try to put some in between or at the start of them as well..to upp the flow a bit..ya' get me?

Anways..good shit..keep at it.

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