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This was feedback posted for allik war
IP:
Lol god dayum t his battle was funny...
Cdusit-
never thought id battle a kid who hasnt posted ten times
this battles unreal ....like dudes got pretend rhymes
^^^^^Not bad of an opener
his first time on the frontlines..but name states war
Im controlling his outcome....like a position in saw
^^^^^War and saw didnt rhyme unless its pronounced right.. okay punch
The decision is raw im submitting his gore kids hitting th floor
War needs more support in this battle like double D's
^^^^The flow kinda fell off right, double d punch was decent
Unsure why he even stepped up maybe newbs like defeat
maybe he likes to be left behind like a bikers seat
^^^^Okay first line, bikers leave their seats behind?
like repeat this feels like a case of de ja vu
cause not even ya alias voting ring could com thru
^^^^^ weak ending in my opinion
overall punches were decent and vocab was good, work on when to switch flows and up on your punches to hit harder B
Allik-
excuse me son u think this daycare,
u knew 2 da game nigga i dont care,
jus spit yo 16 nigga n challenge if u dare,
so if ya in da wrong room please exit there//
^^^^^^Lol nice opener..liked the multis
shatter punchlinewhen i push up when its crunch time,
i give lines meaning n life but through my pain n strife,
^^^^Crunchtime punchline thing kinda played, nice second line..
ya soon 2 be wife and dis game is mine,
my system of words blocks competition,
like ya corner gas station atm reciept reads declined,
im inclined,2 b on da grind//
^^^^Haha wife and game is mine line. the deline line was kinda long but nice..
spittin venemous verses,leavin ya cursin,
go beserk,while im jerkin ya girls bra strap,stop put down da gun son rememba this only rap//
^^^^Long fuckin bar, but a nice finisher
overall-Nice punches, flow, multis and vocab, could make ur barz shorter by a little though
I vote Allik because his punches were more creative and effective. No offence C but ur verse was kinda weak this time..
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