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New to RV
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IP:
Wassup, this was a nice topical..Liked the imagery and shit
As barbed wire hatred engulfs my heart, vicious & cruel
Missed the important rule, keep tite of my one true jewel
^^^Nice opener
Each of her sides ripples across my rough skin to a decline
Falls…dragging my heart,keeping hold of my hearts love vine
^^^^Nice meta and imagery..Real talk
Unforgettable to this day of so many years ponder in my mind
Thoughts that were confined, her subtle touch still left behind
^^^^Nice multi and imagery..
No more words to intertwine, sense of love becomes blind
Things about to always remind, time on my mind to rewind
^^^^Nice vocab and multis..
Conjure up sweet memories, all now but vaguely forgotten
Pain becomes rotten, heart once held high now at the bottom
^^^^Nice imagery
Her perfume lingers in your sense, a tickle in your veins
Love is like the passing of trains, true love never remains
Your heart suddenly drops and explodes like an atom bomb
The saying goes you don’t know what you have till it’s gone
^^^^^Nice meta in the never reamins line. Nice finisher
Nothing wrong with this piece, shit was phat yahmean? Keep doin' ya thing
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