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New to RV
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IP:
Wassup my canuck friend..This was a decent drop though..
The illest has cometh and thou shall be forsaken
Prepare for doometh of thee, death before you waken.
^^^^^Okay beginner..Could use work
Arise in the west and rest in the east flaxen Sun
My day has come, my time is done, my wars have been won
An inner battle of supremacy within me attacked at thee
The tree I consign my death under, coloured mahogany
^^^^Multis were nice but were too long..Nice vocab
Alas, a time when I glistened maliciously as a rupee
Is now over, and my soul has been torn from my body
Consumed by the dark and the light, holiness stolen, see
Holy archangel Aaron, brother of Moses, I fought valiantly
I lived to please, my goodness spreading like disease
^^^^^Nice vocab and shit..
His colossal military to a victory of the greatest finale
Holiness versus the damned hatred and destruction alley
^^Bar was kinda long. Nice vocab
Dubbed upon my body was the pure hatred of God and Diablo
Bestowed with conflict I become two half’s of a whole
^^^^Once again a long bar..nice vocab
The Sun my microscope magnifying my existence, left mission-less
A free being left to be buoyant in sheer happiness
^^^^Long bar, nice vocab, okay ender
strengths-U have potential and nice vocab and flow is decent
weakness-Bars were long and vocab was used a little too much but its diff. from the rest 'cause u doin' u yahmean..
Overall this was a decent drop, just work on your bar lengths and focus on punches, wordplay and better flow instead of just vocab aiight famz
make sure to peep my "Government Policies" and drop some feedback aiight?
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