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Old 11-17-05, 04:29 AM   #29
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Voted For: GKillaz05

Your rhymes need surgery your purgery is not workin'...
Could give you 10 free shots punches still aint hurtin'...
-nice opener, good metaphor, really good flow. Nice way to kick things off, hit quite hard.
I'll spit first even though you'll try to copy my shit...
Thats why when im done spittin' ima copywrite my spit...
-really good, original punch, hit him good.
You could rap featurin Missy and still couldnt work it...
Practice makes perfect Fatal come up short like a circuit...
-Again, good punch and original, nice metaphor.
Kid head like a computer with a fatal error inside...
Tried flowin' down a slide, and just ran off the side...
-haha good, nice metaphor, intelligent punchline and hit him good here. Definitely stepped things up a notch.
Kids terrorfied to go outside, thats why he on the comp...
Stompin' all over you, while you just reak like a swamp...
-good lines here, nice set up, punch didn’t really hit the standard of the rest so far but still good.
Puttin'a red light on ya streak I hold it up like taffic...
Ask Whats whack ya track is, man just stick to graphics...
-KILLER! Great flow in this, good punch that definatley hit hard, personal aswel. Really good there
Smack this herb, thx for the goodluck but Im conceded...
Pothead just proceeded to get the L like he needed it...
-Good again, nice wordplay and good punch again.
Fatal still not dope... killin' ya breathe like scope...
Scientist study'n ya rap cant see skill unda a microscope...
-nice closer, good punch and original. nice metaphor


Talk shyt, its a wrap cuz da six'll pop ya,
sit back n watch him 'choke' like the 'knickerboccers',
-ok opener, nice metaphor but you need to come harder for the first bar I think.
u aint a killa 'poppa', i chill while u ack hard,
put ya name on ma list, n put a grave in ma backyard,
-weak, didn’t really diss him, no real punch here either.
go n grab a gun, n tell da neighbors ya paths marked,
-eh? Not feeling this either, sorry bro
u lack smarts , he's a faggot n a fuckin wimp,
if g's such a killa, someone tell me why's he duckin mims?,
-this is nice, good personal, nice punch, the best bar so far by a long way
read him a bed time story before u tuck him in,
-adding a third line on a bar again. Sometimes this works but you avnt pulled it off here homie
nigga i buck i win, n ya 'dream is through',
every one of ma 'bars' is 'nuts' like a 'peanut chew',
-this is good here, nice wordplay, bit of self-glorification but it works
on a regular basis i'd shock u like a pikachu,
but on dis ossasion i'll just let the nina scream at u
-nah sorry, never got him very hard with the last bar, it needed to be something special after the verse you’ve done but wasn’t.

Overall: GKillaz05’s verse had more disses, it was funnier, more metaphors, some good wordplay and was aimed at the opponent really well.
Fatal’s verse wasn’t on the level at all, not enough of the verse was aimed at the opponent enough and some of the punches were weak.

Completely one-sided battle in my opinion

No hate of course, stay up both of you
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