pretty good pretty good.. i liked it alot but i think
you could have done alot better with the topic..
vocab was alright but it was made up for by the emotion
my favorite line was..

"Each of her sides ripples across my rough skin to a decline
Falls…dragging my heart,keeping hold of my hearts love vine"

i liked the metaphor and the emotion it brought across
overall i liked the drop and i think you should keep going with it
and gimme some more to read lol

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