word yo
first things worst
"Lyrical Universe?" lol sound kinda corny
but word lets see...

your voice do sound VERY robotic, not good.
im not quite sure what can help you there, but word lol
emotion kinda ehh, you still gotta work on that...it did get better as the track went on, but it still seem like you reading.
flow is ok, it falls off here and there, but its ok
lyrics is nice, but ye some lines is stretched
i think my fav verse was second
hook is kind aehh, like i said earlier..lyrical universe is kinda corny, so i found the hook kinda corny

overall its ok, you gotta work on a few things though man. but you are getting better.
hit me back famz

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