another real quality drop from you in not long at all.

You got some talents there, the vocab was really good, you do use your words well. Some nice rhymes and the multitude of similar sounding sylables made the flow very easy to follow and appealing to read.

If il be honest it needed something of an umph to keep attention. I mean it needed a bit of a funny line or something really clever and the every line doesnt need to follow on from the line before if you get me..?
Usually keep that up for about 2-4 lines at a time.

But im a real fan of yours which is why im being brutal this was a really good peice and for someone who i dont see about a lot in the battles and discussions you are good

Im serious if you need a crew to get with for a little while you got a place waiting for you in the gods of war

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