Originally Posted by JonK

plz gimme some feedback this is the first thing i have ever written so yeah i know theres prolly much room for needed improvment so plz rate this..

im so close to pullin my trigga to my guage
while i be lettin out some built in rage
iv kept this shit in so long its time to let it all out
ima show all dese bitch mother fucka what im about
when i get done with this shit there aint no turning back
my whole life iv been told how much repsect i lack
now the retalaition comes in hand
ima prove to all these bitch niggas who i am
i dont got no bling i dont love to sing
i would love to express my feelings the same way as a normal human being
instead i got a gauge in my hand ready for pump action im leaning
more and more over the fuckin edge
takin who ever is closests with me down this ledge
i snap back into reality
thinkin what the fuck am i doin
there so much to live for and a better place to live in when its all done
i look over at the police are screaming drop your gun
i dont listen im to scared
i keep it in the fucking air
i look over i see chunks of hair
the smell of rottin corpse rises i get shot three times i drop
im laying there thinking damn life is full of suprises my heart finally stops
i see three other bodies next to me thinking at least i got some props