Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤
Jonk Verse
¤ÐÅž¤ you said that i shouldnt battle technique i should battle you
ya ass gon get worked so bad ima make ya vet ass look like a fool
^ um no...1st line is jus talk second line again jus talk
im on da mic n spit by the time im don ya mouth gon be full of drool
^ no not feeling it wheres the punch?, diss?, personal?
i want you to know that ya fuckin ass best not choke on my stage
nobody cares if ya die even if ya famous it wont make the front page
^ no not feeling it setup poor @ punch was weak
im bringing my very first text battle win to my record on rap verse
battlin me is like fighting me on da streets ya bound to end up ina herse
^ i had to bold the 1st line coz...knowing Daz's verse (and i haven't looked @ it yet, this isn't going to happen today and 2nd line was A) played B) mega played on the gangsta topic & C) ultra mega wack in combining the both
you would end up with six shots with blood leaking clean threw ya shirt
now its almost the time i end my verse n burry ya ass six feet under dirt
^ again no...1st line gangsta shits played and so's the 2nd line...take note...no-1 cares about shooting people in their lyrics no more...this ain't G-Unit.com
damn i just murked ya fuckin ass so bad it should be considered murdah
ne other haters wanna battle im just gon do the same here and have ta serve yah
^ closer wack, self-gloried no diss...too gangsta...too generic...meh
Overall
To be truthful...you've stepped into the wrong place if you think you will consistantly beat some of the best heads on this site with shit like that...start from the bottom and work your way up...i haven't even peeped Daz's verse yet and already i know who to vote for...my suggestion to you is you need more experience...keep at it though this feeds intended to help...but i think you gassed yaself up too much in this verse and in yourself to be battling at this stage already
¤ÐÅž¤ Verse
so ya hyped to challenge me & prolly hafta bite to dismantle D,
cuz ya rappings all wrong..
........so ill leave ya method-dissed like a type of christianity,
^ 3 line bars = hide stretched structure...but diss is ok punch is ok nothing wowing
see my opener alone destroys ya whole verse you dumb slut,
hell, just call me coach the way im delivering these cuts,
^ self-glory...punch ok...again nothing outstanding
why accept this battle..? your dead meat needin a gurney
i mean this kids whole defence is wacked
.................................... like i just murdered his attourny
^ lol nice bar boo @ 3 line setup but best bar out the 2 verses so far
just 1 more thing thou, you should learn to be more timid kid,
cuz you gotta be wack to say 8-10........unlimited....
^ LOL @ this closers good personal and it's funny...because it's true (although it says 6-8UNLIMITED LINES) i know what ya mean
Overall
Disapointing...if it wasn't for those 2 last ones i prolly wouldn't even be voting for you...but you prolly knew what to expect...jus don't do that too often...coz this verse isn't match winning material...jus lucky 1st guy had nothing to win it with...
Vote¤ÐÅž¤
because it's the quality over quantity that won this...not ya gangsta ish rubbish...but 2 closing bars were only reasonable things out this whole battle...¤ÐÅž¤ up ya anty for christ sake lol