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Old 11-25-05, 07:36 PM   #3
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The drop was nice, but some parts, like the first two lines seemed to be forced. It was more like a rhytmic poem since you rhymed the same words line a bar. The topic was nice and enjoyable and it did flow expect for the forced lines, but overall it was a nice piece. 7.5-10
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