Gladbag,your getting waaaaaay to carried away with multis.Even to the point where some of your shit doesn't make sense.I'ma do a bar-to-bar breakdown to show you what I mean.

You strange in America need a change of character your
Purpose is to hound and be a circus clown dang brain sore
^Ok,the "dang brain sore" part came outta nowhere,and i don't see what purpose it has in the bar.Also,ur wording was fucked.the 1st line,it should have been..
"You strange in America AND need a change of character CUZ your"
^that wat ya' line should have said.The way you put it sounded bad.
Your girl has a hairpin while you have a pair of fins just
Some punk fishes, critical fate in a political state of rust
^WTf is a pair of fins?..that makes no sense.Punk fishes?,that's dumb.And the critical fate/political fate multi in between made no sense neither.If anything,it was forced..seems like you were just trying to put a multi in there just for the hell of it.And that's something you can't do.
Damn shame how you can’t campaign like candidates
Just a failed nerd G, dang jailbird trustee with a plan fake
^Plan fake?,that was forced.Looks like you had trouble trying to rhyme with candidates.And also..how is it a shame that he can't campaign with candidates?I don't think Yung Wun is a politican..so wtf are you talking about?And wtf @ dang jailbird trustee?


Ok,I'm not breaking down the rest..cuz you should get the idea by now.Your making shit that makes no sense.I reccomend easing up on multis..it seems to be hurting your verse more than making it better..

And don't come at me with hate,I'm giving honest feed.