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This was decent, the first few bars didnt rhyme well but it would of worked better as a poem. I liked the concept cause it was original but the imagery needed to be a bit more graphic to really grab the readers attention. The flow was off no multies so it lacked complexity in some parts. I think you need to rewrite this cause i liked the content but the imagery and flow needs some improvement.
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