really feeling this one, just because it had a cool message, with alot of twists incorporated into the storyline....it was really neat to read, the overall outlook was orignal and provacative
^^^^^^^ - which i enjoy the most out of reading pieces on here, and this concept was beyond original, it was unique

well done, here's my fav lines; it was a little section which stood out, in my eyes:

aight, not sure of your tone, i stood stunned n hurt,
think'n events must be repeatin themselves, n i forgot to go first,
our speech was dirt, literally trash talking, spewing about vibes,
here i thought things were cool, but it was minus 32 outside,
i tried, but my speech was kept at bay, i was tounge tide,
n during the ride, it was dead silence.. it seemed sound died,
but you cried in anger at having to treat me like a stranger,
but whats stranger is that you cried outta your anger.
now im not gonna claim that h,ours were perfect,
but at times i felt the cost was well worth it,

opener was sweet too, keep up man

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