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Old 12-04-05, 10:33 PM   #48
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Voted For: Jack Da Rizzle

Daz
um your rhyme scheme was pretty good, but your verse seemed quite simple and childish in it. some of your wordplay came out some what almost forced, but it was doin pretty good. your closer was your best I thought it had a dope flow n multiple twist wiht a simple personal but nothin else really connected and made me think it was great. but it's some what pretty good man.

Jack
your verse wasn't much better, like this was a pretty close battle. But I thought that you were twisting shit up more and connecting your wordplay into decent personals. your rhyme scheme was good and your closer was also my favorite of your verse. so overall i thought you got this by a little bit.

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