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Old 12-05-05, 03:28 PM   #7
fuktheworld
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I'd start off by callin' you whack but thats to much of a compliment...
When I called Young Snowman' out he got offline kid just circumvents...
^^rhyme seemed forced,1st line was cheesy..punch was,mediocre
Takin' down this young jeezy wannabe is easy like I was constabulary...
Say Mim is smart for sayin irrelevent you just got a weak vocabulary...
^^Good punch,but 1st line sucked,and it was waaaay out of place.Your set-ups need to be relevant to the punch.Your just saying shit because it rhymes.
Snow your out of the ordinary becuz you got three balls to proclaim...*
Young is new to RV but your already about to be on the wall of shame...
^^Well,wording sucked,sucked really bad.1st line was garbage,honestly.
I guess you can call it game because everyone is already hatin' you...
Sendin' you to the devil snowmans skill level is low like satan foo'...
^^Foo'?..wtf,that sounds dumb.And the concept of low/satan has been done a lot before,and the other ones i saw were way better than this.
Snowman your lyrics got RapVerse snorin' more G then a borin' story...
Claimin' you were "specifyin one type" you fall under that category...
^^Again,your set-ups are irrevevant to the punch.Your just saying shit,it sounds cheesy,
Try to spit fire havin' no skill is holdin' ya back like a seat belt...
I easily melt this snowman thowin' you around like cards bein' dealt...
^^Played.
It aint' hard not to feal snow bein' cold like this kid was a ghost...
Only place your posts will take you is to 'mental funk' at the most...
^^WTF....
Young my advice is to go learn graphics ya cant make any text rhyme...
Snow's best line would be made up like sayin' 50 got a sex toy line...
^^Your best punch,but wording sucked.

Ok,you bassically cannot word a punch for shit.You are horrendous at it.YOur set-ups need to ve relevant to the punch.And also,your WHOLE FUCKING VERSE WAS STRETCHED OUT.NO FLOW AT IN ALL IN THIS VERSE.

You need work.
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