Voted For: Devils_Reject420

Devils_Reject420

aiight son, its time to take you on a ride/
Man I already know ya Technique is to play Ill and hide//
- Not bad...
you tried and i gives credit where credit is due/
its true, and imma prove that this battle is through//
- No real diss here
get a Clue, my words are all im bout to use/
you need a new Technique if u wanna leave here without a bruise//
- No
got all of RV wonderin who it was that killed you/
like ya sex life, your verbal balls are still blue//
- Not workin...
leave ya ass Cut Flat like the rest of ya Crew/
cuz im an Almighty rapper, known to others as Bruce//
- So?
you got the perfect Technique for ridin my dick/
Ill cuz ya cant rap, and ya flow makes me sick//
- Not original...

I have no idea if you are new to text battling, but whether or not you are keep battling, you seem to have the structure in your verse to improve a lot...having said that, this verse was not that good, you need to be more creative and try to diss and use as many punchlines as possible...flow was ok though

Ill Technique

I'll Place More Cuts On You Than A Blind Barber
Since Your Hits Couldn't Hurt....
Even If Your Mouth Dropped Rhymes Harder
- Not a bad opener
I'll Serve You Up Early Like Breakfast At I-Hop's
Squint One Eye To Find Your Skill.....
But You Even The Crowds Lookin Like Cyclops'
- What?
It's Been Said That Your Skill Ain't Effective
Even His Name Show How This Rapper's Been Rejected
- Ok personal here
Your Location's In Hell, But You Bring No Heat
I'll Beat Your And It Don't Matter If You Mad At Me
But Your Punchlines Hit....
- Good set-up, but I know this continues still a bad rhyme
Sweeter Than Old Ladies With Southern Hospitality
- Ok...
I Light Up Baords Your Force Like Darth Vader
Going Up Against Me....
The Votes Will Soon Show That You The Wrong Mayor
- Not really workin, could have use th concept better

Nice flow and all, good rhyming....some nice lines, but something is missing throughout...you need to use more effective punchlines...but not a bad verse though...

Ok, Stay Up both....anyway, Ill Technique came harder in this battle and won it in my opinion....Devil's reject keep at it, and Technique too....

Not had many votes on my battles. would appreciate any honest votes...

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