From the start it was good, but towards the ending it gotten bad. I liked your imaginary very vividly portrait and detailed, but it seems to me that some of your lines seems force. The creativity of this was nice, kinda like a metaphor piece. The flow was choppy here and there, it's cool that you broke it up into sections, like me Overall this was a nice drop just work on flow and try to point onto the piece once you start a verse. Pz.

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