Ok.

This piece is ok. I think you tried to force a good bit of your lines that rhymed. I mean, it was straight but it seemed as if the ones you wanted to rhyme, may have been a bit forced.

Your vocab was good, it fit in with the piece. The one thing I dont understand is, the overall picture. You were king of here and there. Life is.... and you went on about random things such as finding love.

Overall good piece. The structure was off, but, it flowed in its own way.

about a 4/10 drop.

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