Not bad sinner,.. but your lines are to predictable I would get half way
in a bar and know how your going to close it.

Work on your vocab !! it's to simplistic,.. try opening your mind don't
just drop something thats simply rhymes ! you take the easy way round
think of a word brake it down,.

Also work on your rhyming scheme u come far to basic for someone who
has been here so long...

It flowed well, I liked a few bars it was an alright very but u should be
droping more fire !!!