Voted For: D.Zaster

He's A Disaster, No Wonder He's Droppin Tragedies Here
Since An Elf's Got A Higher Chance At Havin A Good Wrapping Career
wordplay was forced, concept was played..
You Need Your Crew To Win, Since There's No I In D.Zaster
But When They're Gone And You Step U......
.......Everyone Breaks Out In Laughter
the attempt at playing off his name was pathetic..
I'll Hand You A Lump Of Coal For Christmas To Help Build A Spark
You Try To Blend Everyone's Style.....And Find Yourself Ripped Apart
this was just weak man..
I'll Breaks Your Bars Faster Than Fat Kids To Make You D.Z. [for the idiots, dizzy]
So You Can Use It As An Excuse.......
For Posting More Disasters Than The Ones In Ya Siggy
concept for a personal was used poorly..
I'll Place Another Period At The End Of Your Name, Make You Twice The Bitch
Cause You Further Under My Border Than A Chicken, Bean And Rice Mix!
weak closer, the period shit was retarded..

Ok, this verse was weak as hell. You started off with a played concept and some forced wordplay to get you going. The attempted personals were all weak and didn't come off right, you had the concepts but used them poorly. The closer was fucking stupid, doesn't really resemble a punch, or at least not an affective one. Overall, you forced too much, your concepts were either played or used poorly, the personals were weak. OVERALL: 3/10


bitch you can try ya best, but i'll stab you if you rap it hard
since everythings personal to you, ^ i hope you take that to heart
basic opener, been done before..
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Im too far apart, rappin hard to leave you exposed bitch
Your window of oppurtunity was open...till i hit the X and closed it
decent concept and good delivery, funny punch..
fuckin wack shit, Bitch D`s pleasing this crowed
Cos Y`all know If I pull this bitches string...a tampon`ll pop out
these kind of punches been done too many times before, this one was cool though..
You got no clout,and its obvious Ill`s shit lacks
But congrats on being the first dude with lines longer than six flags
average punch, nothing too special..
Your crews wack as fuck, E-styles comin with retaliations
Cos we all know C.S is only dope... When it comes to makin animations
Lol, decent personal, best punch really..

Right then, you came pretty average with a decent opener and a real nice closer with the personal shit. I think you took it easy here really because I seen some of your shit on RB and it is so many times better than this verse you dropped. Some concepts were a little played, you put a nice flip on the one concept. Overall I think your "windows" line and your closer were what won this battle for you. OVERALL: 6/10


V/ - D.Zaster

Word. Return the favour on my battle. The link is in my sig.

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