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Old 12-26-05, 01:05 PM   #6
D.Zaster
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Nice peice.

The repetition was a nice technique to add.

Structure was cool, and rhyme scheme was dope.

The positive outlook on life I cannot attain
For demented and satanical thoughts cloud my brain

Those were my favourite lines.

First stanza grabbed my attention nicely.

Dope peice man.
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