Kool Col-B
no gang, u aint throwin up shit, like wen he's starvin n he vomits
u officially a bitch, a ex-man, so wack its funny, marv'll b a comic
l, o, l. Too many commas. Punch is blah.
im swingin fists at marvolous jay, im hittin tha nerd
i'll turn u black n blue jay, n then im flippin tha bird
Played.
u aint aMERiKaZ NiGHTMaRE!, u america's wet dream
after i make u a vegetable im sho ya gonna get steamed
Set up is played. Punch is blah.
u think u run shit on this site? ha! hardly...
i'll cut u down 2 size n show u that this iz Ma RV
Haha nice wordplay.
its like a game of chess, cuz i'm tha king of this turney
u bout 2 lose, u gittin pawned, see, i'm takin out QUeENS EaRLy!
Punch is kinda played, but it was ok.

Overall, not a ton of creativity, funny punchlines but nothing amazing. Work on wittier stuff.

Marv:
ima merk dis nigga,yeah you alright but i spit sicker homie.
its over 4 dis kid ima make like 'dimetapp' & 'get rid of col(d) b'.
Nah. Wordplay is really forced in there.
ya line's is wack..........and as a man offline you are so butt.
kool say's he nwa's 6th member..well datz da reason they broke up.
Punch was good, set up line was filler though.
my flow's nuts....and dis how suck's he just a fuckin waste of bar.
kol-b in dis korv 3 tourney u like baseball bunts...you wont make it far.
Played.
remember when u was like "your amazin marv",im past da level he text.
fagget aint neva spit 'fire' he like dat 'movie' you just a 'devil reject'.
Nope. Punch is blah, no proof to him saying it, then possible fake personal.
jtr probly wrote ya shit,dis aint even serious i aint dat focus prick.
but still my flow's is sick..ya carrer is like pubic hairs its OVER-DICK!
Random JTR line, punch is played.

Overall, you really need to work on making personals. Most of your stuff are punches, with no real wordplay.

v- Kool Col B

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