this is a remarkable piece, i like how you came creative with the concept. Christmas writings have always been my favorite. I love how you incorporated some pretty dope emotion....your imagery was pretty decent...gave me a good idea what was going on...you were a little jumpy and you were a little offf wit ur emotion here and there.....could have been a tad bit more consistant....but its ok..overall 7/10..peace

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A LIFE OF CHRYME