hmmmm....... creative, and i sort of like how there didn't really seem to be a rhyme scheme, bcuz sometimes we're so busy rhyming we leave out the content, what the piece is really about..... i think it did have okay emotion, but it was too obvious, i think u could've worded it better....... yup, pretty good overall, keep writing -Tweety's #1 fan

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