Voted For: Mentalz

Tech
Your piece seemed wierd a lot of the attempts with the multiples came off weak and it forced your storyline to sound rugged. the imagery was weak and well you weren't as complex as Mentalz was, though you have a similiar style to his but yours just seems like it's a lot forced and rushed.

Mentalz
I thought that you were more complex then he was. your imagery was a lot better and it didnt seem rushed at all, the storyline was also better and well i didn't see much multiples which I now know that you don't need all you need is a great storyline and well yours was better but I've read better from you.

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